But you know, that's where you're going wrong. If you threw in some gratuitous nudity people would be waaay more inclined to listen to your tale. You kinda had something there with the attack on that enchanted kingdom, but that could have done with being played up a bit. Like, throw some swordfights in there, maybe a gigantic construct or two. People wanna read about guts and glory and you're skipping over the good bits!
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But you know, that's where you're going wrong. If you threw in some gratuitous nudity people would be waaay more inclined to listen to your tale. You kinda had something there with the attack on that enchanted kingdom, but that could have done with being played up a bit. Like, throw some swordfights in there, maybe a gigantic construct or two. People wanna read about guts and glory and you're skipping over the good bits!
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